What do you think of my poem? *Moonlight?
Author: admin
15
Mar
What do you think of my poem? *Moonlight?
Moonlights beam
Shiny, lingering clusters of light reflect
Causing the dark starless night
To glow and glitter. Although
She's alone — feel its presence on my skin,
Tingling … softly brushing me.
-Pulling my emotions back and forth; pulling tides-
Far away, its beauty illuminates,
… Yet too close, its rough, untouchable surface appears.
Lovely facade d i s a p e a r s . . .
Unrealistic imagery of perfection fades away; replaced
With craters of flaws. But yet still,
Deepest desire?
Fly to the majestic Luna, cross my heart
Stay there eternally forever,
*the comma at the end is on purpose and the poems not really about the moon lol
5 Responses for "What do you think of my poem? *Moonlight?"
Best Answer – Chosen by Voters I like it
You use few words (unlike me), but still put your point across in a beautiful light. I love poetry like this, that can make someone read it and see things from a new perspective. Awesome
Keep writing! <3
wow………that's really really really really nicei love it Source(s):
it's beautifull!!! though I don't understand the comma at the end and then of what is it?… may I ask?… well.. if you didn't say it already, the I guess not.. sorry:P
I can't tell where your inability to use grammar and spelling ends and where any poetic license is supposed to begin.
I really like it.. and I like how put character into ur poem ny having spaces between the disapear.. and so forth.. Good job
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