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I glanced out of the window to peruse, in time to witness the sun rise on the horizon. The sea sparkled through the magical mists and repeatedly clung on to the shore only to fall back again. I was the personification of that scene. I always seemed to go somewhere, only to mess things up and land right back where I started. it wasn’t the life my husband and I wanted for our kids. I wanted them to grow up and achieve their dreams. That was my only wish.
I turned and crept swiftly to where my sleeping beauties were. I smiled. The bathroom mirror was especially unkind today. Dark circled appeared under my eyes. My hair was dirty and greasy. My face was the same as ever large hazel brown eyes, deep olive skin, chocolate curls and a stunning Grecian nose. You may think, from that description I was pretty, beautiful even, but you couldn’t be more wrong. Deep wrinkles were etched from her eyes with worry. My skin was dry and not looked after and my feet were cracked and dirty. The walls had damp covering them, the floor was carpet less. The only nice, new thing we owned was the only bed in the middle of the room. Yes, we only have a 3 room apartment and yes, I am married with two children, but isn’t it better to be happy than rich? No, I didn’t think so either. I didn’t have a job, so I couldn’t really complain. But Josh, he worked everyday of every week of every month just to keep our family alive.
But today, the first day of 2010, I was going to get a job and I was going to look at bigger apartments and we are going to live like a proper family. We had to. I just wanted to be normal.