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14 Mar
RHH: Rate my verse 1-10?
We all shed the same color blood, breathe the same air
we all live on this earth, but the differance is that i care
so why cant you muthaf*ckers realize we all equal
no matter the color of your skin, we all still people
our diferences should bring us together, not set us apart
but cats have never been able to get along from the start
how can you be better than me for something i can't even controll
can't you see this hate is just taking it's toll
You want us to cure racisms effects
but you refuse to adknowledge your part in it's affects
and when you only cure the result you mask it
which means you mask the problems that we face everyday
whether black or gay, Chicano or phillipino
we all have pain in our pasts, but alast, the turmoil isn't past
as long as we deny our problems our pain will last
help me wth a chorus for this, or at least a name for this song
9 Responses for "RHH: Rate my verse 1-10?"
Pretty good, 7/10.Name- The Race.
Wasn't bad. I mean i don't know how anyone could hate on originality wise because everything has been done before really. As long as you speak how you feel and are being real these dudes got no reason to hate. But on a beat it would be a lot better actually hearing it all come together. Song name "The Same". Source(s): Only based on lyrics and concept: 6.5/10That's above average, i know it looks like a low score but that's good to get that from me.
5/10 Your idea for it is good, but it's pretty predictable. Try to find some new vocabulary (ex. you said apart, and start. then you said control and toll.) , and be witty with your words to get people to listen (like Lil Wayne or Drake) and think about what you're saying. you used words like "that we face" everyday. I'm sure you can think of something better than that. Just revise it, and I'm sure it will get waayyy better. Source(s): I write rap lyriqz
i agree with Paul.. it's the same thing that's been done time and time again.. I read the first couple lines and was already bored.. as far as your lyrical skill, it was ok I guess.. I dont like how you rhymed " effects" with " affects" ; they're almost the same word and it's just an unwritten law not to do that in a rhyme.. I dont hate it , I'm just gfiving constructive critizism..
Im gonna be honest with you.The message the song has I give you a 9The flow probably a 4 (guess id have to hear the beat)As for a name something like "We are the same, even our pain"?
1.It's crap. It doesn't scan and it's the same predictable crap that's been done a million times. Really? A rap about racism? THAT's never been done before.
I am FEELING these lyrics, so I rate it a 71/2 maybe if I could hear you rap this I would rate higher.
I like it .. 7.5/10 && hmm maybe "R.I.A"Or "I Care"
its aight….check out mine. i just asked it
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