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Poets, how could you improve this impromptu narrative poem?
And so, the days passed into years at last
And I, a worthless whiskey-ruined sot
Grew disillusioned thinking of my past
And what I wished I had but I had not.
And one dark night beneath a slivered moon
Out in the countryside, I fell asleep
And in the arms of Morpheus I lay.
And it was there I saw her blue eyes weep,
And realized that long lost afternoon
For her as well as me had been too soon.
And then the vision quickly went away.
I woke then knowing she was ruined too,
And so my quest to win her back began.
I thought then that if we could start anew
I'd be redeemed and be a better man.
I scoured the earth to find my lovely flower,
And this time I resolved I would not wait;
Yes she'd be mine regardless of the cost.
Alas! I found her but a bit too late,
A simple stone in a secluded bower;
I'd had her love but only for an hour —
My only chance at real romance was lost.
3 Responses for "Poets, how could you improve this impromptu narrative poem?"
Lovely story in rhyme, beautiful, read it twice and out loud. I know of many who have taken this path, but have not become disillusioned by it or have thought about the effect that their drinking has on others. Sad, and has left me in deep thought of those I know who are loyally suffering and still together with their partners.I can offer no improvements
don't know how you could improve this piece.I read it through a couple of times to drink in all of it.sad and thought provoking.well done.
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