The darkness was surrounding me and my heart was pounding deathly fast, threatening to burst from my chest. My skin was crawling, maybe because of the freezing temperature, or maybe because of the fear digging at my stomach. Either way, one thing was certain. I had no idea where I was. All I knew was I had to escape. I ran as fast as I could and it felt like no matter where I ran I never felt any walls, or trees, or anything. My throat burned and my eyes watered. I felt this bitter taste in my throat.
"Please somebody help me!," I screamed. What is happening to me?!? As soon as I thought all hope was lost, I saw a miniscule beam of light. In the center stood the silhouette of a man. Finally I ran as fast as my feet could take me. I finally reached him, my throat now felt exactly like it did a few minutes ago but worse. A thousand times worse.
"Please you have to help me! I don't know where I am! My throat is burning, I feel so weak!"
He looked at me for a second. Judging by his face he looked about my age. His skin was so flawless, his eyes made me forget how to breath, his beauty seemed to make time stand still. But all he did was look at me, staring and grinning. Suddenly I remembered my burning throat.
"Um hello!? Please tell me what is going on!," I could barely get the words out, I clenched my teeth together to stop from screaming.
Finally he spoke
"Doesn't feel so great does it?" He asked in a serious almost angry voice.
"Excuse me?!?" My face was red as I fumed with anger. Why couldn't this guy just help me? But before I had timed to ask, he jumped on top of me, pinning me to the ground. His fingers wrapped around my forearm so tight I thought I'd wake up with no arms at all. But it took me less than a millisecond to realize I might not wake up period. Then this strange man did something completely unexpected, his teeth ripped into my flesh, I felt my blood being drained out of my body, The earth was spinning, and then everything went black.

i know vampire stories are a challenge to make original ever since the whole twilight thing. but dont worry nobody is gonna twinkle in the sun. also if you have advice please tell me because one thing i have trouble with is setting the way i write up. like i have trouble seperating what people say and quotes and conversations. im just a beginner so please spare my feelings lmao thanks

p.s.- please tell me also if this is a book ud consider reading. i know the beginning seems like the big climax but trust me it aint.