8 Responses for "May i have some feed back on this poem?"

1. justin bieber March 15th, 2010 at 9:39 pm 1

   my only suggestion is to write out eighteen instead of using the numerals 18. it's better aesthetically. Source(s): I write poetry :]

2. justin bieber March 15th, 2010 at 9:39 pm 2

   ha ha definitely save and read it when you're 40. when you have kids and they're 18, see if you're brave enough to read it to them.

3. lady gaga March 15th, 2010 at 9:39 pm 3

   hmmmmmmmmm its nice workhere i must say "veins able to leak" this "Veins near to leak"its very good pomegood luck Source(s): um ghost

4. taylor lautner March 15th, 2010 at 9:39 pm 4

   could use a lil work but other than that it's pretty good Source(s): Answer Mine

5. Vanessa Hudgens March 15th, 2010 at 9:39 pm 5

   it's fantastic. its a great representation of the endless pursuit of, in this case, teenage aspirations. marvelous

6. Vanessa Hudgens March 15th, 2010 at 9:39 pm 6

   whooaaa my soull brother; That ****'s hellaa deeepp<3no seriously, this is really good (:

7. taylor lautner March 15th, 2010 at 9:39 pm 7

   pretty good. Expand it and add sum more stuff about the cocoon, and the new world dat awaits u

8. miley cyrus March 15th, 2010 at 9:39 pm 8

   thats pretty deep, nice