is this poem ok? or should it be longer.?
Author: admin
26
Mar
Is this poem ok? or should it be longer.?
your the most beautiful girl alive,
i dont see why you try and hide.
you have a smile that can
be seen for miles.
your eyes i cannot describe,
the true beauty thats inside.
smooth and soft your lips are,
as i press mine against yours.
shy and quiet is how you act,
when your with me and thats a fact.
i do not mind that you are,
cause your with me and not that far.
you say you need makeup to look pretty,
but i say it makes you look silly.
true beauty comes from within,
not what you put on your skin
2 Responses for "is this poem ok? or should it be longer.?"
wow, i think this poem is amazing, you really are in love
, i dont think i should be longer, i think its just the right length. do not change a bit, it really shows you true feelings to this girl. she must be very lucky. x
It's the right length. I can tell that you are in love.I wouldn't say it's the best poem but it's the personal message and thought that counts.
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