13 Responses for "Is this poem emotional for you?"

1. taylor lautner March 14th, 2010 at 4:02 am 1

   "You stumble out the door"…This phrase is used a lot.With different phrases, in many different peoples' poems.My advice would be to change it, but that's just me."Your the one thing i have left" should be something like; "You're the one thing [that] I have left."The [ ] means that it's not needed, but would be a good addition."We are both weakening" and "You the most" seem very awkward to me.My advice is to reword/revise them, and possibly combine them to one line.Make sure to check and double check your grammar and spelling.That always makes for a very good poem.I know that your question was "Does it make you emotional?".Well, yes and no.It's the same thing as I've read before, put differently.To me I think that if you structured it more, and maybe worked on word choice and things like that it would be better.Make me more emotional.It seems like you just sorta got the idea in your head.Something that looked, sounded, and al around seemed like a great idea.But then when you wrote it down it didn't turn out so great and you just said forget it and walked away.I know that that's a bit on the harsh side, and I don't mean it to be.But, I think that's the only way [most] people can take criticism.If it's nice then they'll brush it off.Don't get me wrong, it's a good poem!And could be worked into something great.Just keep it up, and after you think you're done working it out, re-post it.Keep up the great work, and never stop writing.<3 Sari

2. taylor swift March 14th, 2010 at 4:02 am 2

   yes indeed its emotional for me and i told you don't limit it up to floor the word Earth i guess is more better then floor any ways that what i have in my mind and i could be wrongagain its very good poemgood luckand if you may answer mine please Source(s): um ghost the great

3. Vanessa Hudgens March 14th, 2010 at 4:02 am 3

   The rhyming at the end threw me for a loop. I actually prefer poetry that doesn't rhyme. Either way, it is of good quality. More punctuation would make it stronger, as would breaking it into stanzas.

4. Vanessa Hudgens March 14th, 2010 at 4:02 am 4

   Awesome poem!! Yeah it's emotional, but I think it's great that you can express yourself this good through poetry Peace? and Love?

5. taylor lautner March 14th, 2010 at 4:02 am 5

   the emotion gets lost in the repitition, try writing something smaller need more descriptions, and less maybe, I's and you's

6. Vanessa Hudgens March 14th, 2010 at 4:02 am 6

   wow yes i like it, very emotional!! well done, keep on writing, ill be reading could you take a look at mine?http://answers.yahoo0o0com/question/index;_ylt=ArY9TAkKudrpLJc7MEGm_Dfty6IX;_ylv=3?qid=20100309043729AA6vytS

7. taylor lautner March 14th, 2010 at 4:02 am 7

   yeah i feel your pain…and if you wrote this could you help me!?http://answers.yahoo0o0com/question/index?qid=20100308204859AAWextw seriouslyy; you effin good

8. taylor lautner March 14th, 2010 at 4:02 am 8

   Yes! This is a very emotional poem, it gives off a very strong sad feeling. Yet, it is quite good.

9. lady gaga March 14th, 2010 at 4:02 am 9

   It's void of emotion, just reporting does not create anything.

10. justin bieber March 14th, 2010 at 4:02 am 10

    I really like the poem I love the rhyme scheme and lots of emotion.

11. Vanessa Hudgens March 14th, 2010 at 4:02 am 11

    its very good, and i know the meaning, but i cannot realate

12. justin bieber March 14th, 2010 at 4:02 am 12

    I actually prefer poetry with more rhyming in it, but it is a pretty nice poem. Is this your work?

13. selena gomez March 14th, 2010 at 4:02 am 13

    It's a great poem. Please email me your future poems.sehrlangsam@gmail0o0com