How do like my story starter?
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Mar
How do like my story starter?
I lay watching in content as the light cast a rainbow across against the dreary crème wallpaper, it was a kaleidoscope, twirling and spiraling down towards unsightly probably once white, but now stained muddy tinged carpet. Its beauty entranced me; I identified a very striking purple colour that resembled amethysts and watery emerald, it was pretty, very pretty actually, it reminded me of the colour of my mother’s eyes. Her eyes were gone though, rotting away in her skull as she decomposed… I shocked by my heinous thought that turned a beautiful light reflection into a disturbing mental pictures of my mother’s bones slowly transforming into dust, her skin turning leathery, like a mummy. I gave myself a dirty look and through off the nave duvet. I had to distract myself in an attempt to halt gruesome thoughts of my mother’s body and her untimely demise. Her demise. It was shocking and sudden, well sudden for me I was to na?ve to see her suffering, her unclean thoughts of ways to kill her working away in her mind. It was because of him, his violent attacks against me and my mother, if she had never met Patrick. She wouldn’t have committed suicide, in our old flats bathroom. She wouldn’t have bled to death whilst strewn across the linoleum shivering, the colour a whiter shade of pale.
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I need some serious help, can someone help me with names, a direction on where the story's going e.g.
3 Responses for "How do like my story starter?"
Best Answer – Chosen by Voters I need some serious pay if I'm going to help you.
Not to be mean, I suggest you work on your English skills. Besides that, everything else is up to you. Let it all come from your head.
There are a few things I didn't understand very well I had to re-read it a couples time to understand what you had meant. There are also a lot of unanswered questions that rose up while reading that i believe should have been addressed in the beginning such as where was this light coming from? is the light colored itself? If so how is it colored? is it a rainbow? Is there a glass pane that's coloring the light? and ect. Imagining the mother dead should be enough for any kid to get freaked out about. The kid would have to have some serious mental issues to imagine their mother rotting away. Names should be chosen after getting a good grasp of their character their name defines them so chose carefully. I would need more ideas from you to give you a hand of where the directions going such as Did patrick treat his mother badly what is this kid going to about patrick. I'm sorry if anything i said offended you in any way. This is from an American point of view so it might be different from yours. ( btw your English is fine don't bother yourself with lee) Source(s): Myself
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