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15 Mar
Honest opinion, what do you think of these lyrics? Please answer!!!?
(Please don't say that you like it just to be voted best answer, say what you really think. lol)
If you have any tips or ideas, let me know
I don’t understand…
The way I still long, for the touch of your hand.
I’ve been hurt too many times before,
Said I was through,
But you keep coming back,
Knocking on my door…
And I let you in.
Well, I’m not gonna let you win again.
What happened to my confidence,
Why are you acting innocent,
When you’re the one that did this to me…
You’ve tried to play these games before,
But I can’t take it anymore…
What happened to my pride?
I’m starting to believe your lies…
And oh,
When did I become,
The insecure one?
You seemed so perfect,
That I was ashamed…
But who said that means you can beat me down?
I only have ONE name.
Beauty’s only skin deep, you didn’t pass the test.
It’s time for me to move on,
You never cared about the rest.
What happened to my confidence,
Why are you acting innocent,
When you’re the one that did this to me…
You’ve tried to play these games before,
But I can’t take it anymore…
What happened to my pride?
I’m starting to believe your lies…
And oh,
When did I become,
The insecure one?
I need time to find myself again,
You need to go,
I don’t wanna stay friends.
You tried to keep me under your spell,
All I have to say,
Is you can go to hell!
What happened to my confidence,
Why are you acting innocent,
When you’re the one that did this to me…
You’ve tried to play these games before,
But I can’t take it anymore…
What happened to my pride?
I’m starting to believe your lies…
And oh,
When did I become,
The insecure one?
5 Responses for "Honest opinion, what do you think of these lyrics? Please answer!!!?"
i really like it. i bet a lot of people can relate to what you're trying to say especially teens your age. with all the teen relationships and stuff. maybe even s can relate to it too.i honestly think that it'll sound different and probably a lot better if it were sunglike a full on song…but otherwise i like it a lot
I would clip verse one and cut the 3rd verse down to a bridge. Verse one is pretty cliche-ridden and, with a strong chorus, you don't need so much between the 2nd and 3rd chorus repeat.
I like it, nice and bitter lol, try to add a few metaphors, it seems a bit literal at the moment almost like an argument, but keep at it!!!!!!
its realy good but, i think the typ of way you sing it will make the biggest impact. i think you should sing it very slow or medium slow otha wise its amazing
Too juvenile. Too straight forward. It's like reading a story that just won't end – far too repetitive and mundane. There simply is no poetic flow or interest to your style. You are flat out telling us everything, which leaves no room for interpretation or personalization. Learn to be more transparent. Use fewer words to speak of deeper things.
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