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15 Mar
HONEST OPINION!!! What do you think of these lyrics I wrote?
If you have any tips or ideas, let me know
I don’t understand…
The way I still long, for the touch of your hand.
I’ve been hurt too many times before,
Said I was through,
But you keep coming back,
Knocking on my door…
And I let you in.
Well, I’m not gonna let you win again.
What happened to my confidence,
Why are you acting innocent,
When you’re the one that did this to me…
You’ve tried to play these games before,
But I can’t take it anymore…
What happened to my pride?
I’m starting to believe your lies…
And oh,
When did I become,
The insecure one?
You seemed so perfect,
That I was ashamed…
But who said that means you can beat me down?
I only have ONE name.
Beauty’s only skin deep, you didn’t pass the test.
It’s time for me to move on,
You never cared about the rest.
What happened to my confidence,
Why are you acting innocent,
When you’re the one that did this to me…
You’ve tried to play these games before,
But I can’t take it anymore…
What happened to my pride?
I’m starting to believe your lies…
And oh,
When did I become,
The insecure one?
I need time to find myself again,
You need to go,
I don’t wanna stay friends.
You tried to keep me under your spell,
All I have to say,
Is you can go to hell!
What happened to my confidence,
Why are you acting innocent,
When you’re the one that did this to me…
You’ve tried to play these games before,
But I can’t take it anymore…
What happened to my pride?
I’m starting to believe your lies…
And oh,
When did I become,
The insecure one?
9 Responses for "HONEST OPINION!!! What do you think of these lyrics I wrote?"
It's good. One of friends has been trying to start a band for about 4 years now, but most her songs aren't that great (she's sort of insecure, so most of the time I had to lie to her about everything). She didn't even have people audition or anything like that (even asked if I wanted to be in the band, but I said no) so there's still no band yet.
in my super honest opinion, i can only say……………………………….… that I LOVE THE LYRICS! IT IS GREAT! Source(s): mine=)
Sounds pretty good..would be cool to actually hear the song…great break up song kind of like Since You've been Gone.
thats amazing! your an awesome poet and song writer! keep up the great work!
Awosome!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!…
I think it's hot…what's the tempo ?
that is awsomesounds like a pro wrote it!
hmm i woudlnt call it poetry as somebody said, but then again who am i to judge what is poetry.eh its alright in all honesty, i cant put my finger on whats missing. its almost like its just very simple that its something iv heard alot before in most popular pop songs.not saying its bad.juist it takes time to get good at writing songs. if you REALLY study singers you pick up things naturally.an eg of 2 great songwriters (obviously these are only 2 of very many billy corgan from smashin pumkpins is a good eg of a modern writer)Rory Gallagher-Im Not Awake Yet (acoustic/celtic)http://www.youtube0o0com/watch?v=oHv1MHKid…Elbow- Forget Myself (they should have been famous years ago, UNREAL live)http://www.youtube0o0com/watch?v=wDddtQN7F… Source(s): irish bass playerhope i didnt come across to negative cause i didnt mean too
I like it, and especially this line :And I let you in.Well, I’m not gonna let you win again.In the chorus though, I would change the amount of "who, what where's.."you could say something likewhat happened to my confidence, youre acting all innocent? you can say whatever but idk, just my opinion
its really good though
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