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26 Mar
Girls – is my poem worth giving?
—– Heather —–
Heather: the pinnacle of love,
As graceful as the purest dove,
Your presence encapsulates my very heart,
It's just, it's my heart that's split apart.
I may not be yours, but you are mine
I wanna shout to the Heavens, 'Her presence is divine!'
And it's every time I think that I've forgot about you,
I dream at night, stare through the fretwork – reality: adieu,
Heather:
Affettuoso amoroso,
Delicato e dolce,
Un anima appassionato…
Maybe I'm different to other guys,
More sensitive, to the fact that I sometimes cry,
I understand some peers appear quite rude,
But rude is the word which I exclude.
So maybe you see this as a pathetic leap,
But in my eyes, *your* beauty, truly is skin-deep…
6 Responses for "Girls – is my poem worth giving?"
Best Answer – Chosen by Voters Definitely change the last line – "is" should be "is beyond" right? No one wants to be told their beauty is only skin-deep, they want to be told that it's beyond skin-deep!Other than that, what a romantic poem/gesture. I would feel so honored to have someone write something like this for me. Then again, no one has ever written me anything, so of course I think it would be an honor. Haha. Anyway, I would give it to her. How is she ever going to know how you feel if you don't? I know it's cliche, but, you always miss 100% of the shots you don't take. You should never be afraid to express your honest and true feelings, and that's what you're doing in this poem. If you think the time is right for you, and you know that you'll never regret it by giving it to her, then do it.
Good, however some parts need revision. "As graceful as the purest dove" – replace word "purest""Maybe I'm different to other guys" – change to "…than other guys""More sensitive, to the fact that I sometimes cry, I understand some peers appear quite rude, But rude is the word which I exclude." – too negative, make more positive, also maybe don't state that you cry. It's good though
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awe, that is sooo sweet
yes you should give it to her Source(s): please answer mine
that is such a sweet poem. yes, you should give it to her.
Oh my god…That is simply marvelous. I keep telling you, you have a marvelous talent.
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