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26 Mar
Do you think my poems are good enough for publishing?
beauty divine,
makes me feel all is fine
deepest eyes,
see through all the lies
purest soul,
this love doth take it's toll
crystal tears,
you take away my fears
darkness sweet,
you lift me from my feet
brightest scorn,
love so, always leaves me torn
"Masks" (name is a work in progress)
the devil in an angels gown,
but a wolf in sheeps skin,
upon her head is a golden crown,
her guise merely paper thin,
she turns the bright smile to a frown,
with a foe as so, i can't win
all i can do is watch as we slowly drown
and as that devil impishly grins
"Phoenix"
a poetic mind, a beautiful soul
the broken heart, doth take it's toll
a shattered mirror, an open heart
the twisted way and injured part
a shredded letter and shivered forfeit
my mangled remains and crippled spirit
a new life, with this damage to fix
but through flame I rise, a phoenix
"Eyes"
It hurts for me to feel like this
to look but see no more chances
to feel as if I'm falling in an abyss
To always melt at the smallest glances
to aim for a mark but endlessly miss
to feel stabbed by icy lances
to hope, and pray, for just one kiss
but only to be frozen and stare in trances
"Breathless" (another work in progress)
the wary raven, is mournfully crowing
on a cold night, it's innocently snowing
and the reaper, he is out mowing
seeds of sorrow, he is sowing
and the river Styx, is ever flowing
check your fear, for it is growing
hear the horns, they are blowing
it is your time, and all signs are showing
well thats most of them, i have a few more but these are the ones i like the most, any comments or criticisms are helpful and welcomed =)
PS the Work in progress poems need titles so if anyone has ideas it'd help me out ALOT
11 Responses for "Do you think my poems are good enough for publishing?"
I say… try it! Worst that happens is they say no! But they could say yes if you try! I know of two people that have been published as far as poetry goes. One is my best friend… the other's my girlfriend. So… there's no real way to tell without trying to get them published.Go get them published… but keep the mentality that you're wasting your time… that nothing will come of it. Then if something should get published, let it be a shock, a surprise… then you won't be depressed if it doesn't.Yes they are good… good enough to be published… that's something only a publisher can tell you.Hope this helps and good luck!Nice poems and thanks for the comment on mine!
NOT AS GOOD AS THIShttp://www.youtube0o0com/watch?v=Yu_moia-o…LOLOLOLOL @ YOUR "POETRY" BTW
I love your poems. So beautiful. I love a guy who can express his feelings. How sweet it would be to have a guy write a special poem just for me. Your poems are so sweet.
Your pretty good
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good luck!
I like "Masks" a lot.
Very awesome.You're really good at poetry.
You are very good. You provided a lot of emotion in your poetry, a thing that attracts many readers.
OMG!!! THERE AWSOME =D ESPECIALLY THE PHEONIX ONE!!!
Wow pretty damn good poems i say and yes clean them up a bit and they could get published.Good luck with your dreams.
ok I only read the first one but i dont like the word doth, but its good
wow.. those were great! Made me feel like my pomes are crap! LOL
"Because I could not stop for death, He kindly stopped for me."Emily Dickinson. That is poetry.Your Bitter Sweet is sophomoric. Beauty divine to torn. What is the subject?Masks. No, it only force imagary That is bad.Breathless has a subject. Death. Good work.
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