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15 Mar
Could everyone please read my poem and tell me if its good or not?
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The southern breeze carresses my cheek.
as i breath in i smell… everything.
the grass, the trees, the sun.
cooling my skin
warming my heart
I look accross the land
I see nothing yet its the most beautiful sight ive ever seen
vast beauty of nature
Its magical
Unlike anything else
I love this place
waking to such beauty
ive taken it for granted
I finally see there is none like it
I feel unworthy
Breathtaking
something so beautiful could only be sculpted by Gods awesome hand
So powerful
so briliant
undescribable
I feel loved
Gods love
I see it in the Dogwood Trees
I See it in the soft green grass
And i feel it in the loving breeze
Ive never noticed before
never realized
never opened my eyes
but i finally see
there is no other place id rather be.
5 Responses for "Could everyone please read my poem and tell me if its good or not?"
Best Answer – Chosen by Voters I see innocence and youth, your words can make one feel the sun's heat on a winters day. At your age you got it! I give it a 10. Keep up the great Talent.
Hey This is really such a nice poem….Very nicely you describe about the nature around you…. keep writing kid..Good luck!
Its good! Your very good at describing things!
i liked it. but im not much for editing. i liked reading it
thats a good poem
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