2 Responses for "Comment my poem?? [20 characters]?"

1. miley cyrus March 14th, 2010 at 4:06 am 1

   Um… this isn't reflecting your actual life, is it? If so, I recommend you seek help (not mental help, but protection of some sort). In my experience, poems are written reflecting the writer's life, so if you only wrote this with no connection whatsoever to you, I apologize. Pretty dark, but it looks like something you'd find in a book ("Your" should be "You're", though).

2. justin bieber March 14th, 2010 at 4:06 am 2

   try thisThe bottle lies shattered on the earthI am there to pick up the piecesMy heart is beatenSame with my skinYou stumble out the doorI don't know what to doYour the one thing i have leftTherefore I care about youEvery night is the same nightWe are both weakeningYou the mostI'm not sureHow still I have this little strengthI don't believe in GodsNo matter if I didWould he puts this to an end?I'm shakingI don't know what he'll do nextMaybe mark me again?The bottle lies shattered on the earthJust like my heartI pick up the pieces once moreThis time I'm walking out the doori changed it a little hope you like itits nice poem 9/9good luck Source(s): um ghost the great