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15 Mar
Can you please tell me what you think of my poem…?!?
She looked at the rose, that she twirled in her hand
And thought sullenly how nothing ever happened as planned
The thorns on the rose continued to pierce her skin
Unaware of the torture that was soon to begin
The clouds in the distance rolled slowly towards her
And she wished with great grief that the pain wouldn't be directed for her
His haunting figure stepped in though the light
And her heart skipped in stuttered with terrible fright
He drew back his hand, but she bit back her scream
Imagining herself in a terrifying dream
He touched her face softly, feeling the warmth of her skin
As her stomach rolled in disgust with what was about to begin.
His eyes took in her beauty which caused her such pain
And his hand fell hardly against her, hard like the rain
Yes it was the rain disguising her tears
drowning out all sound and peaking her fears
Her rose then fell softly with hate to the ground
Falling to pieces with hardly a sound.
4 Responses for "Can you please tell me what you think of my poem…?!?"
Best Answer – Chosen by Voters this is a thoroughly lovely and deep piecewell done
WOW…. very powerful! I have to admit I am very surprised. At the beginning I was thinking that this was just your average self-pity poem but omg I hope to god this isnt told from 1st-hand experience. Great poem and if this has happened to you, please give me the guys information…….. Once again Amazing poem!!!
I like it!
i like this a lot! i think that you described it well. is it about abuse?
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