Can you help me with this explicit lyric I have written?

This lyric is explicit. My concern while writing it was making the content artful and tasteful, rather than being crude or blatantly pornographic. The song IS about sex, however it was designed to be tasteful and create a beautiful image of love. But I'm not sure if I captured that. So… What do you think?

Making Love
Written By: Timothy Carter ? Hollyw00d Ent. 2009

~Verse~
Reminiscent of youthful pleasures
Discovering for the first time again
Her passion rains of a thousand summers
Awaiting her next touch with suspense
And as our lips touch life is given
Through the look in her eyes all’s been said
Our pulsing bodies are only driven
By anticipation of what’s ahead

~Chorus~
As I gaze on her silhouette
Feel the heat of her flames as I sweat
I find myself lost in her beauty

Never have I felt this way before
She whispers in my ear as I move through her doors
Her voice so sweet, ethereal and soothing

~Verse~
Her lips feel like a waterfall
Flowing gently down my chest
Run my nails through golden hair
Before she deals euphoric bliss
And as she moans her blue eyes stare
Sending chills through every vein
My body screams in all directions
I only want for her the same

~Chorus~
As I gaze on her silhouette
Feel the heat of her flames as I sweat
I find myself lost in her beauty

Never have I felt this way before
She whispers in my ear as I move through her doors
Her voice so sweet, ethereal and soothing

~Verse~
I break the skin and touch her senses
Her body tenses in the darkness
Hours pass by as I’m relentless
With desperate cries she can’t suppress
I caress dripping lips with my tongue
As wandering hands roam all about
She tastes of fruit sweet and exotic
And waves of lust pour through my mouth